All over the world, societies are facing a growing problem with obesity. This problem affects both children and adults. What are the reasons for this rise in obesity? How could it be tackled?
In recent times, most people
are
dealing with obesity worldwide. The statistics illustrate that the number of people who are affected by Wrong verb form
have been
this
has increased significantly and these individuals can be at any age. This
essay will look at causes
of Correct article usage
the causes
this
and propose some solutions.
One of the main causes of the problem is that many people nowadays eat junk food and prepared food. Despite these kinds of food are
delicious, they contain a lot of sugar, salt and oil which can cause Wrong verb form
being
another diseases
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another disease
other diseases
human
body. Fast foods Add an article
the human
such
as fried chicken or pizza and chips are clear-cut examples of them. The solution is for the government to raise taxes of
them which could be an effective way to decrease overweigh problems.
Another problem is that working out has become less common than before. Yet, the prices are super expensive, and Change preposition
on
moreover
, it is the most difficult task. The way forward can be to do work out on a daily basis which makes your body fit and also
more energetic, despite the prices. Sports such
as body building
and swimming are popular and they are recommended by doctors these days.
A third reason which leads to Correct your spelling
bodybuilding
overweigh
is related to genetics. Correct your spelling
overweight
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at
ages
which they have inherited from their family. In the US, Correct the article-noun agreement
age
for instance
, about 30 per cent of the society are
coping with Correct subject-verb agreement
is
this
according to
the news. To tackle this
issue, they have to refer to the doctors in order to recommend some pills or surgery.
In conclusion, obesity has become more epidemic these days and the reasons can be the
diet, Correct article usage
apply
exercises
or Fix the agreement mistake
exercise
genetic
related, Change the adjective
genetically
however
, there are some effective ways to prevent this
. In my viewpoint, governments should take an actions
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actions
an action
such
as advertising healthy diets and gyms which may encourage them and also
raise awareness.Submitted by Ah.mahdavi1365 on
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task achievement
Make sure to have a clear main idea for each body paragraph and directly relate both the causes and solutions to obesity, with specific examples.
coherence and cohesion
Improve logical structure by ensuring paragraphs flow seamlessly from one to the next with clear topic sentences and appropriate use of cohesive devices.
task achievement
In your conclusion, summarize your points more effectively to demonstrate the progression of your argument.
task achievement
Consider adding more specific examples and data to support your claims, which will enrich your argument and make it more persuasive.
coherence and cohesion
Work on paragraphing to enhance readability. Each paragraph should deal with one main idea, and there should be clear distinctions between them.
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