the graph below shows the average monthly change in the prices of three metals during 2014
The line graph details the changes between
three
kinds of metal, consisting of copper, nickel, and zinc in 2014.
Looking from an overall
perspective, it is readily apparent that every three
metals had a lot of fluctuation over the given period.
To begin
with, the nickel started at 6% in the first month, then
dropped dramatically to -3%, after a little growth, remained for almost three
months, and eventually rose to 1 for the last
two months.
On the other hand
, two metals remained, copper and zinc, had the same pattern. At first,
the beginning point for zinc was 1 in June month. Then
, started to decrease in the middle of the year and after three
months remained steady, the same as nickel, increased to 2 at the end
of the period. The copper had a dropping trend at around -1 at first,
then
started to rise to 1, after some fluctuations, the final point was approximately 2, like others.Submitted by s_karimi2002 on
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