The diagrams below show the changes that have taken place at West Park secondary school since it's construction in 1950. Summarise the information and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevent 1950 Main road Houses school Farmland playground 1980 Main road Car park science block school Sports field play ground 2010 Main road Car park science block school Sports field play ground

The diagrams below show the changes that have taken place at West Park secondary school since it's construction in 1950.

Summarise the information and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevent

1950

Main road

Houses school

Farmland playground

1980

Main road

Car park science block school

Sports field play ground

2010

Main road 

Car park science block school 

                    Sports field play ground
The given maps illustrate the changes of West Park Secondary
School
in three different years. The years were divided into 1950, 1980, and 2010.
Overall
, it can be clearly seen that there was a major development of facilities surrounding the
school
and
houses
were removed. As the maps show, in 1950,
houses
and
school
buildings
was
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located to the south of the main road.
Subsequently
, the was farmland behind
houses
and a playground after
school
. In 1980, a car park and science block were constructed at the expense of
houses
, with the science block adjacent to the
school
.
Moreover
, the farmland has been replaced with sports fields. In the
last
year, 2010, the carpark was extended to the south by removing the sports field. Meanwhile, the sports field was relocated to the east using the third part of the playground area.
Lastly
, the
school
building and the science block remain unchanged.
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Conclusion: The conclusion is too long.
Vocabulary: Replace the words school, houses with synonyms.
Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "changes" in your introduction.
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