Social interaction between people are destroyed by technology. Do you agree or disagree.
Verbal
communication
between people
are
destroyed Change the verb form
is
due to
technology
. I agree with this
statement because development
of social media platforms Add an article
the development
such
as Instagram, Snapchat and Facebook and non verbal
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nonverbal
communication
reduce social interaction.
In a
modern world, Correct article usage
the
people
are changing towards non verbal
Correct your spelling
nonverbal
communication
which kills the social connection between the
Correct article usage
apply
people
. Now a days
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Nowadays
people
are
communicate through texts , calls ,and messages rather than Unnecessary verb
apply
face to face
Add a hyphen
face-to-face
conversation
which not only Fix the agreement mistake
conversations
reduce
the emotional bonding between Correct subject-verb agreement
reduces
people
but also
create
conflict in Correct subject-verb agreement
creates
a
relationships. Correct article usage
apply
For instance
, studies conducted in the United States reveals
that Correct subject-verb agreement
reveal
people
are spending more than six hours on mobile devices in a day for different purposes such
as entertainment and videogames which in return
affect the social life of the Replace the word
turn
people
.
Furthermore
, technology
pave
Change the verb form
paves
way
for the development of social media platforms where Correct article usage
the way
people
are
interact with others by sharing photos and videos in a virtual manner. Because of Unnecessary verb
apply
this
relationship
between Fix the agreement mistake
relationships
the
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apply
people
are affecting
in a serious way. Wrong verb form
affected
For example
, recently in the United States a study was conducted between two groups of people
where one group were communicate
through mobile phones and Change the verb form
communicated
other
group Correct article usage
the other
were communicate
verbally, the result Wrong verb form
communicated
reveals
that Wrong verb form
revealed
people
who use verbal interaction make
better Verb problem
have
relationship
with Fix the agreement mistake
relationships
other
Fix the agreement mistake
others
which
compared with mobile Correct pronoun usage
apply
communication
.
In conclusion, in the modern world technology
reduces the social connection between individuals. I agree with this
because technology
platforms like social media completely kills
the verbal interaction between Change the verb form
kill
the
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apply
people
and create conflict inbetween
the relationship.Correct your spelling
between
in between
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