Social interaction between people are destroyed by technology. Do you agree or disagree.

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between
people
are
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destroyed
due to
technology
. I agree with
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statement because
development
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of social media platforms
such
as Instagram, Snapchat and Facebook and
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nonverbal
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communication
reduce social interaction. In
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modern world,
people
are changing towards
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nonverbal
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communication
which kills the social connection between
the
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people
.
Now a days
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people
are
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communicate through texts , calls ,and messages rather than
face to face
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conversation
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conversations
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which not only
reduce
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the emotional bonding between
people
but
also
create
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creates
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conflict in
a
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relationships.
For instance
, studies conducted in the United States
reveals
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that
people
are spending more than six hours on mobile devices in a day for different purposes
such
as entertainment and videogames which in
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affect the social life of the
people
.
Furthermore
,
technology
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way
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the way
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for the development of social media platforms where
people
are
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interact with others by sharing photos and videos in a virtual manner. Because of
this
relationship
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relationships
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between
the
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people
are
affecting
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in a serious way.
For example
, recently in the United States a study was conducted between two groups of
people
where one group
were communicate
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through mobile phones and
other
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the other
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group
were communicate
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verbally, the result
reveals
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that
people
who use verbal interaction
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better
relationship
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relationships
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with
other
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others
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which
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compared with mobile
communication
. In conclusion, in the modern world
technology
reduces the social connection between individuals. I agree with
this
because
technology
platforms like social media completely
kills
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the verbal interaction between
the
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people
and create conflict
inbetween
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between
in between
the relationship.
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You are not ready for IELTS Speaking, if you

  • Can’t speak smoothly without pauses.
  • Use simple words and lack vocabulary.
  • Feel nervous and anxious when speaking.
Topic Vocabulary:
  • Globalization
  • Digital communication
  • Social dynamics
  • Cyberbullying
  • Synchronous and asynchronous communication
  • Virtual reality
  • Interpersonal skills
  • Digital native
  • Screen time
  • Emotional detachment
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