Littering in cities is an increasing problem which needs to be dealt with. Some people think that steeper fines is the best way to deal with the problem. To what extent do you agree?
Today the problem of littering in the urban areas is growing and forces authorities to find some decision for solving it. When numerous individuals think that the best solution to manage
this
problem is to increase the fines, I am convinced that the solution should be a complex one. In this
essay, I am planning to spotlight some aspects of this
.
Firstly
, it should be taken into account that higher fines could be not affordable for everyone and, consequently
, could lead to some disbalance in a
society Correct article usage
apply
such
as disproportional affection to lower-income individuals. As an alternative solution
it could be an improved Add a comma
solution,
system
of community services as a penalty such
as cleaning yards, streets
, painting fences and so long.
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and streets
In addition
, maybe authorities should spend more funds to
putting more bins, Change preposition
on
enlargening
recycling Correct word choice
and enlargening
system
. Another way to take steps forward in fixig
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fixing
this
issue is the role of education in foresting
a culture of responsibility towards the environment. Verb problem
fostering
For example
, if a person is tought
from Correct your spelling
taught
thought
its
very childhood that throwing candy papers on the street is a wrong Correct pronoun usage
their
his
her
behavior
, he will remember Change the spelling
behaviour
this
for the rest of his life.
In conclusion, increasing fines to solve the littering problem could be replaced by some complex system
such
as community works, an increased number of bins, improving recycling
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the recycling
system
and making Correct article usage
an essentional
essentional
part Correct your spelling
essential
in
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of
educational
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the educational
system
, and making individuals more responsible toward the surrounding.Submitted by ruben.kirakosyan on
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Work on expanding your body paragraphs with more concrete examples and details. Instead of just mentioning an idea, delve into it with specific times or places where such measures could be effectively implemented.
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Try to organize your ideas more logically, ensuring that each paragraph has a clear central theme and that all sentences within it support that theme. You can improve the cohesion of the essay by better connecting your points and ideas with a wider variety of linking words and phrases.
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Develop a more definite conclusion that summarizes your key points effectively and reinforces your stance on the issue. Don't introduce new ideas in the conclusion but provide a clear statement about your opinion.
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Present a more balanced view by discussing the opposing side - why some people might strongly agree with steeper fines, to fully address the 'extent' part of the question. This will show a range of ideas and perspectives.
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Fully explain your ideas
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