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The table below provide information on rental charges and salaries in three areas of London.

The table below provide information on rental charges and salaries in three areas of London.
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table below represents
proportions
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the proportions
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on
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 rental prices and
salaries
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 in different areas of London
city
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.
Overall
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,it is evident that the biggest figures
was
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 shown in Notting
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hill
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,
whereas
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 the smallest numbers
shown
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were shown
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 in
fulham
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Fulham
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.
According to
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 the graph,rental charges and
salaries
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 in Notting
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hill
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 made up for
1 bed
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1-bed
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 room 375
pounds
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 and
salaries
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coprised
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comprised
comprise
approximatly
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approximately
 98,500,
respectivly
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respectively
.Compared to
other area
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another area
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 like Regrent's
park
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Park
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 was a bit smaller which accounted for 325
pounds
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 for 1 bed,
respectivly
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respectively
. In the case of
3 bed
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rooms
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rooms,
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 there is the same trend
of
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in
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 prices and
salaries
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.When it comes to
the
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Notting
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hill
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Hill
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 with 3
bed
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bedrooms
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rooms
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,it made up 738
pounds
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,
consequantly
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consequently
.The smallest proportion of areas was in Fulham which
accaunted
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accounted
 for 600
pounds
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 for
3 bed
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3-bed
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rooms
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. It may be concluded from
table
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the table
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 that
most
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the most
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 expensive
rooms
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located
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are located
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 in
notting
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Notting
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hill
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while
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,
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apply
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 the cheapest
rooms
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 located in
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the fulham
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fulham
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Fulham
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 area.

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Common mistake: Your writing should be 150-250 words.
Basic structure: Change the third paragraph.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words salaries, hill, pounds, rooms with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Only 6 basic words for charts were used.
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Vocabulary: The word "table" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "proportions" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the third paragraph.
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