The charts below show the chanages in ownership of electical appliances and amount of time spent doing housework in households in one country between 1920 and 2019.
The two charts provide data on the percentage of families in an unnamed country that possessed labour-saving devices
together with
the average time
weekly on domestic chores over a one-hundred-year period. The data reveals a clear relationship between the growth in ownership of such
devices and the decreasing amount of time
devoted to household tasks.
According to
the data, as the years increase, usage of labour-saving devices increase
Correct subject-verb agreement
increases
either
. It can be clearly seen in 1920, the use of washing Rephrase
apply
machine
, Fix the agreement mistake
machines
refrigerator
, and vacuum Fix the agreement mistake
refrigerators
cleaner
was only below 50%, Fix the agreement mistake
cleaners
however
, there was a significant rise in the next 20 years, those
three appliances Correct word choice
and those
was
up to 60%. Change the verb form
were
Furthermore
, although
refrigerator and vacuum cleaner already reached their peak in 2000 and remained stable until 2019, washing machine has experienced a slightly decline 1980, then
went up gradually after.
Aside from that, the average amount of time
devoted to domestic chores declined moderately over the years. The trend started in 1920, families
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when families
need
to spend 50 hours a week Wrong verb form
needed
to
washing clothes, preparing meals, and cleaning, Change preposition
apply
then
it went down rapidly to 15 hours weekly in 1980 and remained steady until 2000. Moreover
, it decreased again until reached only 10 hours of amount of time
spent to do housework in 2019.Submitted by nurulfitriakamilah on
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