In some cultures, children are often told that they can achieve anything if they try hard enough. What are the advantages and this disadvantages of giving children this message?

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In today's world, based on some cultures kids have
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that should attempt so much to
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their aims. Certainly, there
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benefits and drawbacks
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we discuss both points and
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. first and foremost, we should mention achieving our goals in
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more and
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getting harder
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competitions that exist among
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and young people.
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hard efforts and
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success
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path can not be wrong nowadays.
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my country
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that
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is one of
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the countries
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that
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children
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have similar
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, kids usually should get higher scores in school and they
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it is a certain way
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complete
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and
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from their parents,
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popular between friends and increasing their
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. In fact, it is good for their condition in society and
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, unfortunately,
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has some disadvantages.
Children
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who have
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, always
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a huge range of stress in their
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life
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usually not
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kindly
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humans and day by day when you
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mature,
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choice and priority in
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more complex.
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children
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worlds and childhood memories, they starting treat
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jealous
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jealous
, comparing themselves with others and focus on being better
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accept
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their abilities and
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their own future way In conclusion, putting pressure on
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if be
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enough is very beneficial but achieving everything
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harsh
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not
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worthy always and has following bad impact on
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days.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • achieve
  • try hard
  • positive mindset
  • self-belief
  • motivates
  • ambitious goals
  • resilience
  • determination
  • confidence
  • self-esteem
  • growth mindset
  • unrealistic expectations
  • disappointment
  • failure
  • effort
  • hard work
  • seek support
  • individual differences
  • abilities
  • capabilities
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