Task 1 The chart below gives information about how families in one country spent their weekly income in 1968 and in 2018.
The given chart demonstrates the data about households in a particular country spending their weekly income between 1968 and 2018.
It is interesting to note that in 1968
people
spent large
amount of Change the article
a large
money
to buy a food
(35%) Remove the article
food
a portion of food
whereas
people
in 2018 gave more priority to spending their money
to
Change preposition
on
entertaining
, almost 23%.
In 1968, Replace the word
entertainment
people
spent almost over
Change preposition
apply
one third
of Add a hyphen
one-third
weekly
wage to buy Correct pronoun usage
their weekly
a food
but spent much less on accommodation (10%), compared with Remove the article
food
a portion of food
people
in 2018, almost one fifth
of their income. Add a hyphen
one-fifth
Furthermore
, in 1968, families purchased fuel and electricity over 5% and clothing and shoes one tenth
of the whole income. Add a hyphen
one-tenth
Although
, households after 5 decades did not give as much value Correct word choice
However
stood
at nearly 3 - 5%, respectively.
Moving to Wrong verb form
standing
further
details items
for household and personal use were acquired for same
amount of Change the article
the same
money
, about 8% in 1968. But households in 2018 spent equal
amount of Add an article
an equal
money
for
household Change preposition
on
items
unlike
personal Add the comma(s)
, unlike
items
which were only 4%. Finally
, the last
two sections which are transport fees and entertainment showed similar trends in 1968, roughly 7% - 8%. In 2018, it had grown to almost 14% on transtort
fees and 22% on entertainment.
Correct your spelling
transport
Overall
, it is seen that each section valued
differently over 50 years except Add a missing verb
was valued
household
Change preposition
for household
items
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Vocabulary: Replace the words people, money, items with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "give" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "amount" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "almost" was used 4 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "about" was used 2 times.
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