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The two charts below show the living arrangements of two different age groups in a certain country in 2015.

The two charts below show the living arrangements of two different age groups in a certain country in 2015.
The given pie charts illustrate how people of different groups of
age
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 choose to live in a particular country in the year 2015.
Overall
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, types of living with
parents
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 and flatmates account for the biggest
of
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total in
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age
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ages
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 25-34. For the 35-44
age
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 group, living with a partner or spouse is the largest for others and living with
parents
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 is the lowest.
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, for the 25-34
age
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 group, living with
parents
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 and flatmates share the same at about 35% each. Following
that is
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 living alone and a partner accounts for a quarter of the total. Next is 35-44
age
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, most people
also
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 have a family so living with a spouse is the most popular, nearly a half of the total. After that, living with
parents
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 and alone occupy around 20%. And the
last
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 one living with roommates is the smallest in
this
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age
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 group, which is just about 15% of the total.

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Vocabulary: Replace the words age, parents with synonyms.
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