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# ****The age of the population of Iceland between 1990 and 2020**** The graph gives information about the age of the population of Iceland between 1990 and 2020. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

# ****The age of the population of Iceland between 1990 and 2020**** The graph gives information about the age of the population of Iceland between 1990 and 2020. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
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The graph illustrates the data
of
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on
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population
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the population
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for
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of
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 different
age
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 groups in Iceland between 1990 and 2020.
Overall
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, the
age
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 between 25 to 54 is the highest
population
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 in Iceland in the period of 1990 to 2020. The other
age
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group
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has
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had
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 some
population
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 in 1990, 2000,2010 but they had
decreased
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a decreased
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 amount in 2020. The
population
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 from the
age
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between
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of
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 25 to 54 had about 30% in 1990, since
then
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 people in
these
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this age
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age
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 increased steadily and it reached
to
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the
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a
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 peak in 2020
about
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at about
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to
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50%. The second largest
population
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group
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 is
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the age
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age
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aged
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 between 0 to 14, and
also
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 the youngest
group
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, the
population
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 was about 25% in 1990
,
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after
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and after
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 that people dropped slightly in the remaining three years, it had only about 18% in 2020.
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age
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ages
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 between 15 to 24
has
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had
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decent
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a decent
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population
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 in 1990, the trend
lead
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to
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downwards, the
population
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 was less than 20% in 2000 and 2001,
it
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and it
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 was the
least
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lowest
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population
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 in 2020
about
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at about
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 9%. The two
age
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group
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groups
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 between 55 and 64 and 65 and over people had the few
population
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 in these years, not more than 15% but
55
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the 55
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 and 64
age
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group
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has
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was
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 slightly higher than the above 65
group
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, it had about 13% and 10% respectively in 2020.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase your introduction. Words match: 78%.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words population, age, group with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "about" was used 6 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "slightly" was used 2 times.
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