The charts below show the growth in the population in some of the world’s largest cities as well as the population distribution in urban and rural areas. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The charts below show the growth in the population in some of the world’s largest cities as well as the population distribution in urban and rural areas.

Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
The chart given compares the surge of
world's
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the world's
show examples
population
in certain highly populated cities. From the general overview, it can be seen there was a significant increase each of years. Starting with the year 1970
where
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when
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the birth rate was the lowest, Tokyo became the topmost
population
growth with approximately 15
million
citizens
live
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living
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there followed by New York and Shanghai where those two cities had more than 10
million
of
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apply
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citizens. On the other side, Bombay citizens were only 5
million
and
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apply
show examples
followed
with
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by
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Jakarta which was half of total Bombay's
population
.
Moreover
,
while
the majority of cities showed a big growth
of
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in
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total
population
, New
York
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York's
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numbers did not rise significantly which only showed less than 5
millions
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million
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from 1970 to 2010. More than that, Tokyo still had the highest
population
even in 2010 with more than 25
million
of
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apply
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folks
along side
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alongside
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to
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apply
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Bombay which nearly shared
exact
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the exact
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same numbers.
Furthermore
, Jakarta grew remarkably from less than 5
million
in 1970 to more than 5
millions
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million
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per
years
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year
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which showed its peak in 2010 with almost 20
milion
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million
of individuals.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words population, million with synonyms.
Vocabulary: The word "showed" was used 3 times.
Vocabulary: The word "growth" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "significant" was used 2 times.

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