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n today’s world many people own a smartphone. Do you think the advantages of owning a smartphone outweigh the disadvantages?

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In today's digital area, the development of social networking sites is a primary motivation for each person's relationships and a convenient life. Its negative aspect is the bad reality of social publishing distraction.
This
 author will explain the reason why the cons of using technology
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 outweighed by the benefits
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. The vital role of technology is helping us get on well with others easily. In the past, it was hard to contact friends or relatives that were far away from us, and the only way to chat together was the letter and it took a long time to give and receive it. But now, we just click and we can talk, and call others who are in different cities or countries.
For example
, an immense of social networking sites like Facebook, Messenger and Discord are used globally.
Thus
, the pros of using social media help us contact more easily. The other advantage of digital is known for its convenience.
This
 means that many actions will organized on social networking sites like shopping, drawing or studying and we can do anything without traveling.
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, many lessons on YouTube are updated to have a higher quality
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 students who learn at home or it can be seen that the mere reason for the decrease in the retail industry is
due to
 the rise of purchasing online through the Shopee app.
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, its benefits play an essential role
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 our lives and it cannot be indisputable.
Nonetheless
, a minority of teachers and parents worry about its other aspect and they have an opposite point of view
that is
 a digital distraction. Many students are easily distracted by social media and they will play video games or surf the internet
instead
 of studying.
This
 may be true, but its simple solution is locking online websites that do not allow them to use, help us to focus the lesson and use it in the correct direction is using it for searching information.
However
, the disadvantage of using social media is outweighed by the pros
due to
 the effectiveness of communication it helps us.

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coherence cohesion
To improve coherence and cohesion, ensure that each paragraph has a clear main idea and that the ideas within the paragraphs are logically ordered. Use a variety of linking words and phrases to connect ideas smoothly and ensure that each paragraph flows naturally into the next.
task achievement
To enhance task achievement, be sure to fully address the prompt by discussing both advantages and disadvantages in balanced detail. Provide specific and relevant examples to illustrate your points and develop your arguments more thoroughly for a more complete response.

Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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