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Chorleywood is a village near London whose population has increased steadily since the middle of the nineteenth century. The map below shows the development of the village. Write a report for a university lecturer describing the development of the village.

Chorleywood is a village near London whose population has increased steadily since the middle of the nineteenth century. The map below shows the development of the village. Write a report for a university lecturer describing the development of the village.
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The picture depicts the expansion of Chorleywood in the 19th-20th century. The main differences can be seen in the number of villages and the access to transportation.
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, the city experienced a pretty consistent growth regarding the population and infrastructure from each year's category.
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, we can see that the construction of public transport began in the 20th century, precisely in 1909 when they started building railways for trains so villagers could easily use them to commute. Decades later, the highway was built in 1970, making it even easier for the community to transport
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.
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, there were
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 several new developments for the village area in which people reside. The process can be separated into four different stages. The first stage was in 1868-1883, there was only 1 small housing area near the nowadays station. Afterwards, the second stage in 1883-1922 managed to build another 1 but larger village just beside the previous one.
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, 2 and 5 new spots were made in the third and fourth stages, respectively.

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Introduction: The introduction is missing.
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Conclusion: The conclusion is too long.
Introduction: The chart intro is missing.
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Basic structure: Change the third paragraph.
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Basic structure: Change the fourth paragraph.
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Introduction: The chart intro is missing.
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Vocabulary: Only 4 basic words for charts were used.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the third paragraph.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the fourth paragraph.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • village
  • population
  • increased steadily
  • middle of the nineteenth century
  • development
  • location
  • factors
  • contributing
  • physical
  • infrastructural
  • effects
  • conclusion
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