"The maps below show a science park in 2008 and the same park today. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant." Write at least 150 words.

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The maps compare the improvement of a Science park in 2008 and today.

Overall

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, the massive changes in green areas, public facilities, and research buildings can be seen.

Initially

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, the wide

Grassland

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located

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is located

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the northwest

area

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, and to the east of

Grassland

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has

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there have

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been offices and a reception in which the latter has been altered to

university

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a university

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hub.

However

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, all

Grassland

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area

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areas

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disappeared

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apply

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which

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apply

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Research and development

has

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have

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been erected, and a pathway has been added to reach each building. Interestingly, two big threes

are still existed

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still exist

have still existed

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Furthermore

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, a

grassland

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the east

area

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disappeared as well,

whereas

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it has been built a big cyber security, but has

reduce

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reduced

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the car park

area

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, located in the middle

area

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Bus

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The bus

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stop

has been

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located to the east of cyber security. For business units building and three

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area

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areas

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which

has

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have

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been located on the west and southwest, respectively, are still

remined

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remained

reminded

However

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, it

center

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centre

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to the east of the three

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area

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areas

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demolished

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was demolished

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and it has been used

for

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innovation

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an innovation

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center

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centre

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. To the south of the business units has been added cycle path

along

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has been

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. The station

also

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has been erected

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the south

area

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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "however".

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Basic structure: Change the third paragraph.

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Vocabulary: Replace the words grassland, area with synonyms.

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Vocabulary: Only 6 basic words for charts were used.

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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the third paragraph.

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6
Linking words
meeting the goal of 7 or more
2
Word repetition
meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
24
Grammar mistakes
detected issues

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Overall Band Score

Coherence and Cohesion: 8.0

Logical structure

Single idea per paragraph

Introduction & conclusion present

Accurate linking words

Variety in linking words

Lexical resource: 4.0

Varied vocabulary

Accurate spelling & word formation

Grammatical Range: 4.0

Mix of complex & simple sentences

Clear and correct grammar

Task Achievement: 6.0

Complete response

Suitable writing tone

Appropriate word count

3 paragraphs

193 words

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"The maps below show a science park in 2008 and the same park today. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant." Write at least 150 words.

Rich countries often give money to poorer countries, but it does not solve poverty. Therefore, developed countries should give other types of help to the poor countries rather than financial aid. To what extent do you agree or disagree? You should write at least 250 words.

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