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The charts below show the performance of spending on roads and transport in four countries from 1990 to 2005. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The charts below show the performance of spending on roads and transport in four countries from 1990 to 2005. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
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The bar chart illustrates the rates of spending on
road
 and transportation between 1990 and 2005.
Overall
, it is evident that three of the four countries' spending
for
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 transportation decreased;
however
, the
figure
 for the USA increased throughout the period.
Italia
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Italy
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 and Portugal represented
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the highest rates
for
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of
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 spending on
road
 and transport. In detail, in 1990, Italian authorities
spend
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spent
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 more than a fifth of the total budget,
even
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and even
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this
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though this
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figure
 peaked in 2000, at nearly 23%, it ended just below
the
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20%. The columns for
Portugual
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Portugal
 decreased gradually over the period, the
figure
 started more than a quarter of
total
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the total
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 in 1990
,
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 and ended at 20% in the end. Turning to the
remainig
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remaining
 countries, the UK had the lowest percentages over the time frame. British
goverments
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governments
government
spend
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spends
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 one in ten of
total
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the total
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 budget
for
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on
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road
 and transport, even
this
figure
 peaked in 2000, culminating the
procees
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process
in
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just below the beginning percentage, like Italia's trend.
Finally
, 10% of
total
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the total
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 budget
used
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was used
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 for
road
 and transportation in the USA, despite a
fluctation
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fluctuation
,
this
figure
 reached 15% in 2000.
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Conclusion: The conclusion is too long.
Vocabulary: Replace the words road, figure with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "figure" was used 5 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "percentages" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "decreased" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "just below" was used 2 times.
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