The two maps below show an island, before and after the construction of some tourist facilities.

The two maps below show an island, before and after the construction of some tourist facilities.
An island is described on maps, and some visitor facilities are added to that place. The diagrams illustrate the condition of an island before and after manufacturing of different basic requirements
such
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reception area, cottages, tracks, paths and so on.
In addition
, the place consists of 100 meters. The first figure mentions the situation of an island which only contains a beach or some bamboo trees. But in the second one, there is the development of various luxuries for tourists. There is
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of yachts by which they have access to the bridge
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and is attached to the seashore.
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, motor vehicle tracks are built which surround the reception building and
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toward the restaurant.
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, basic requirements of rooms are
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fulfilled where they can spend time to get some rest.
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paths are formed throughout the accommodation area and
then
it brings toward the beach. Swimming spots
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available at Beach Point.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • island
  • before and after
  • construction
  • tourist facilities
  • maps
  • changes
  • comparison
  • description
  • implications
  • personal opinion
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