The two maps below show an island, before and after the construction of some tourist facilities.

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An island is described on maps, and some visitor facilities are added to that place. The diagrams illustrate the condition of an island before and after manufacturing of different basic requirements

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reception area, cottages, tracks, paths and so on.

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, the place consists of 100 meters. The first figure mentions the situation of an island which only contains a beach or some bamboo trees. But in the second one, there is the development of various luxuries for tourists. There is

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availability

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of yachts by which they have access to the bridge

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and is attached to the seashore.

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, motor vehicle tracks are built which surround the reception building and

leads

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toward the restaurant.

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, basic requirements of rooms are

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fulfilled where they can spend time to get some rest.

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paths are formed throughout the accommodation area and

then

it brings toward the beach. Swimming spots

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also

available at Beach Point.

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The two maps below show an island, before and after the construction of some tourist facilities.

In many countries goverment are investing new technology to deal with the public. Why this is happening? Do you think this is an appropriate use of goverment money?

Some people believe that it is best to accept a bad situation, such as an unsatisfactory job or shortage of money. Others argue that it is better to try and improve such situations.

In recent years, “responsible tourists” have paid attention to preserving both culture and environment of the places they visit. However, some people say that it is impossible to be a “responsible tourist”. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

In some countries young people have little leisure time and are under a lot of pressure to work hard in studies. what are the causes and its solution?