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The table give information about salaries of secondary/high school teachers in fivr countries in 2009.

The table give information about salaries of secondary/high school teachers in fivr countries in 2009.
#information #salaries #school #teachers #fivr #countries
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The table provides information regarding the incomes of high school teachers in 2009 from five countries selected.
Overall
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, these countries inform the certainty of teachers'
salary
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 rise that can be achieved in 2 segmented
years
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 of dedication
such
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 as in
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first
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the first
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year
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 and 15th
year
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 with various
years
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 taken to reach the maximum
salary
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First
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 of all, the highest
salary
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 records come from Luxembourg with 80.000
USD
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 in
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first
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the first
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year
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, 112.000 in
15th
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the 15th
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year
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 and
limit
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a limit
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139.000
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of 139.000
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USD
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 within 30
years
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.
Second
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 lead is Denmark with 47.000
USD
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 in
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year
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the year
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 and remained steady in 15th with 7.000
USD
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 addition if working for more than 8
years
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. The rest
such
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 as Australia, Korea,
Japan
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and Japan
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shows
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show
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 the
salary
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 starting point is less than 35.000
USD
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 in
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first
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the first
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year
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.
furthermore
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, the average increment of
salary
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 in these nations does not double even after 9 to 37
years
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working
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of working
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.
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, Denmark and Australia state the increase
of
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in
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 teachers' maximum
earning
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earnings
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 are attainable in 8 to 9
years
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, the quickest among other countries,
eeven
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even
 though there is no rise after those
years
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.
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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "such".
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Vocabulary: Replace the words salary, years, first, year, usd with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "information" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: The word "rise" was used 2 times.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • annual salary
  • gross income
  • net income
  • cost of living
  • purchasing power parity (PPP)
  • economic indicators
  • wage disparity
  • median wage
  • livable wage
  • compensation package
  • inflation rate
  • educational funding
  • professional development
  • currency exchange rates
  • teacher retention
  • standard of living
  • qualifications
  • experience level
  • tenure
  • collective bargaining
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