The table give information about salaries of secondary/high school teachers in fivr countries in 2009.
The table provides information regarding the incomes of high school teachers in 2009 from five countries selected.
Overall
, these countries inform the certainty of teachers' salary
rise that can be achieved in 2 segmented years
of dedication such
as in first
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the first
year
and 15th year
with various years
taken to reach the maximum salary
First
of all, the highest salary
records come from Luxembourg with 80.000 USD
in first
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the first
year
, 112.000 in 15th
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the 15th
year
and limit
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a limit
139.000
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of 139.000
USD
within 30 years
. Second
lead is Denmark with 47.000 Add an article
The second
USD
in year
and remained steady in 15th with 7.000 Add an article
the year
a year
USD
addition if working for more than 8 years
. The rest such
as Australia, Korea, Japan
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and Japan
shows
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show
salary
starting point is less than 35.000 USD
in first
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the first
year
. furthermore
, the average increment of salary
in these nations does not double even after 9 to 37 years
working
.
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of working
In addition
, Denmark and Australia state the increase of
teachers' maximum Change preposition
in
earning
are attainable in 8 to 9 Fix the agreement mistake
earnings
years
, the quickest among other countries, eeven
though there is no rise after those Correct your spelling
even
years
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