Some people think that the best way to succeed is to get a university education, while others disagree and say that it is no longer true nowadays. Discuss both views and give your own opinions.

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these days or not seems to be the subject of public
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of common ideas,
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believe that the best way of achieving skills to aim for a fulfilling job opportunity is
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in universities.
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would not flow with the improvement of nowadays technology. Technology development is a key factor in
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advanced careers.
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also
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higher education for ambitious
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study. Owing to
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and free courses, higher studies
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accessible
for students around the world. To me, the value of
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outweights
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outweighs
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degree which could lead to nothing without the first factor.
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means that the process of learning could
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accrue
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concern,
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result
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • university education
  • higher pay
  • sweated and sacrificed
  • higher education
  • time, effort, and financial investment
  • specialized knowledge and skills
  • job prospects
  • economic contributions
  • valuable contributions
  • fairness and equality
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