The pie charts below show the proportions of visits to Ireland last year by age group, and by gender and type of visit.

The pie charts below show the proportions of visits to Ireland last year by age group, and by gender and type of visit.
The pie charts give information about tourist’s age group, gender and type of visit to Ireland for
last
year
.
Overall
, the proportion of women and men spent most of their time on leisure activities rather than
business
.
Furthermore
, the majority of young people or those who did not reach
the
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retirement age had the largest proportion of visitors . Now, turning to the details, the first pie chart shows that 45-54
year
old people are the biggest group making up about 45-54 per
cent
. Next , the second largest group are 25-34
year
old tourists , who contribute 23 per
cent
, followed by 35-44
year
old people with 19 per
cent
.
Lastly
, the rest of the age groups
ranked
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from 6% to 11%. It is obvious that
last
year
,
business
trips to Ireland were more popular among men than women ( 43 per
cent
and 40 per
cent
respectively). The
business
trip
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by women received a very small proportion of visitors , compared to the moderate amount of men’s
business
visits.
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