The table give information about salaries of secondary/high school teachers in fivr countries in 2009.
The provided diagram depicts statistics regarding salaries received by secondary teachers in five different countries in the year 2009.
Looking from an
overall
perspective, it is readily apparent that Luxembourg offered the highest teachers' wages from starting to maximum. Furthermore
, Korea took the longest time in terms of years
that were needed to reach the peak salary, while
Denmark showed the opposite trend.
In detail, junior high school teachers in Japan started off with the lowest revenue of 28 thousand
USD
per year but increased to 49 thousand
USD
after 15 years
, before finally
registered
at 62.4 Wrong verb form
registering
thousand
USD
in maximum. Australia and Denmark, on the other hand
, showed a relatively short range of salary which peaked at around 50 thousand
USD
after 8 to 9 years
of working. Moreover
, as mentioned earlier, Luxembourg's secondary education showed the first-rank overall
wage, which extended from 80 to 139 thousand
USD
each 12 months. Nevertheless
, the topmost salary in that city could only be carried off after a 30-year labour period. Taking a notably longer period, Korean mentors should take up an additional 7 years
of active working
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