Some people believe that professionals, such as doctors and engineers, should be required to work in the country where they did their training. Others believe they should be free to work in another country if they wish. Discuss both these views and give your opinion.

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views
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the views
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above discuss whether
professionals
like doctors and engineers should be required to
work
in the country where they learned their education or can freely
work
anywhere. I strongly believe that expert should be free to choose where they would like to
work
regardless of where they acquired all their knowledge.
Firstly
, as
professionals
, all of the basic learning materials are already structured and internationally standardised.
Such
as
doctor
, wherever a person tries to learn to be a
doctor
, he/she will find out that their basic materials across the world are the same. They will learn about physiology, nerves, brain, heart, digestive system, and so on.
This
is why, no matter where a
doctor
is learning from, they always become a
doctor
everywhere across the
countries
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. Like when there is an emergency situation in a flying aeroplane, the pilot always trusts
if
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that
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there is a
doctor
inside that plane to help (
this
indicates that a
doctor
will be forever a
doctor
in
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everywhere)
Secondly
,
besides
doctors, engineers
also
face similar conditions. Usually, we find engineers
work
in industrial sites or plants and they have specialisation in specific areas of expertise. An engineer should be able to do his/her job no matter where it is.
For example
, a general
machine
engineer in the US should
also
be able to conduct the same
work
in Albania under the condition that the
machine
should be the same. Unless the
machine
is very specific and only a certified person can operate it,
then
the engineer needs to acquire some certifications to be able to operate that
machine
. But
this
won't affect my opinion that they still can freely choose where country they want to
work
. In a nutshell, my belief is strong that
professionals
can
work
anywhere
as
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they wish. There is no hesitation that their origin country where they did their learning can bind them to stay. Unless other countries need very specific certifications,
then
professionals
must obey them
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The essay covers the topic and provides an opinion as required, but it could improve by discussing both sides of the argument more evenly. Ensure that both views are given equal consideration and depth in the discussion.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • professionals
  • doctors
  • engineers
  • required
  • training
  • home country
  • cultural
  • linguistic
  • advantages
  • economic impact
  • free
  • another country
  • globalization
  • international collaboration
  • improving
  • skills
  • knowledge
  • experience
  • opinion
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