The table give information about salaries of secondary/high school teachers in fivr countries in 2009.

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84,500, the Jaban by 62,400.

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The table give information about salaries of secondary/high school teachers in fivr countries in 2009.

Every year several languages die out. Some people think that this is not important because life will be easier if there are fewer languages in the world. To what extent do you agree or disagree with this opinion?

In many professional sports, there is an increase in the number of athletes using banned substances to improve their performance. What are the causes of the phenomenon and what are some of the possible solutions?

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In many countries goverments are investing in new technology to deal with public. Why is this happening? Do you think this is an appropriate use of goverment money?