in today's world many people own a smarrtphonedo you think the advantages of owning a smartphone outweight the disadvantages
Nowadays,
almost
people are used to Correct your spelling
most
smartphones
. Because smartphones
an essential human objects for communication and work. But
spending a large amount of time using a smartphone can lead to health problems. Correct word choice
However
This
essay will discuss its
advantages and the advantages of Change the word
the
this
problem.
On the one hand, smartphones
help us search everything
which we find. Change preposition
for everything
Moreover
, it helps us in our work such
as contact, chat, and email to support our work. Teenagers can learn many things regarding their studies. For example
, we can relax on the smartphone after a day of studying and working. Due to
we have positive energy in the afternoon.
On the other hand
, there are some teenagers such
as students are play games instead
of studying. Besides
, studying is getting worse and worse, sometimes
I don't want to study. They spend time on Correct word choice
and sometimes
smartphones
playing games which increases health diseases such
as obesity, Correct word choice
and eyes
eyes
problems.
Change the noun form
eye
To
conclusion, everybody has a mobile phone. It has advantages Change preposition
In
such
as providing information to the students regarding studies. It has also
many disadvantages such
as using an excess mobile phone can lead to obesity. So we should allocate reasonable time between watching the phone and working.Submitted by [email protected] on
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