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The line graph below shows US consumers' average annual expenditures on cell phone and residential phone services between 2001 and 2010.

The line graph below shows US consumers' average annual expenditures on cell phone and residential phone services between 2001 and 2010.
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The graph depicts the comparison of the average cost of cell
phone
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services
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 and residential
phone
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services
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 over 10 years and it is measured in dollars.
Overall
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, both were going on an opposite trend to each other.
According to
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 the data, in the beginning, residential
phone
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services
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 were popular in society with approximately 700$ in total that people were willing to spend.
Then
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 the figure went down gradually each year until it crossed the line with cell
phone
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services
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 at below 600$ in 2006.
On the other hand
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, cell
phone
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services
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 were not that favoured by individuals at first with only 200$ in a year.
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, it went up moderately and crossed the line with residential
phone
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services
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 in 2006 with more than 500$.
Then
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 it climbs rapidly almost getting 800$ annually.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words phone, services with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "went down" was used 2 times.
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