The ınternet has changed the way we communicate. Much communication today happens through social media. Some people support this and think it is a positive development. Others believe that social media have negative effects. Discuss both this views and give your opinion.

Nowadays social
media
is one of the most important means of communication.
Due to
this
, some
people
think that it is a natural and positive way of developing
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human
comunnications
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communications
communication
, but I believe it has some negative effects.
This
essay will discuss both points of view to get reasons for it.
Firstly
, social
media
is a big evolution because it can reduce the distance
betwing
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between
people
.
For example
, online
chating
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chatting
can
connet
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connect
two friends from different
contries
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countries
.
Moreover
,
this
kind of
media
can generate new
conections
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connections
that would not exist without
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.
For instance
, if you like surfing you can connect with other
people
around the world
that
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who
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loves
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surf
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too,
by
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a community on Facebook.
This
would not
happend
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happen
happened
in real life,
consequently
, we can say that social
media
gives us a new tool to connect
people
.
On the other hand
, there are some negative effects
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being
the fast growing of social
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media
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in our daily lives.
This
network is a very cold and
unpessoal
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unprofessional
way of communicating,
people
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to be looking at a screen for
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a long
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times
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.
Consequently
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it can generate disconnection and distance
betwing
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between
the present moment of the
people
.
Moreover
,
people
can hide their identity and generate fake news or hating
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discourse
.
For example
, we saw a lot of fake news growing in the
last
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president
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election. So
its
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gets
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clear that we can´t say there is no bad side
on
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to
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the advent of social
media
. To
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summarise
summarize
,
the
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online
medias
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media
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get us
a
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new tool to
connet
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connect
people
around the world, but it has some negative effects
due to
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unpessoal
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unpastoral
nature.
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Coherence & Cohesion
Ensure that your essay has a clear introduction, body paragraphs, and conclusion. Make the transition between paragraphs smoother by using a variety of cohesive devices.
Coherence & Cohesion
Develop your main points more thoroughly with specific examples and explanations. Each paragraph should center around one clear main idea, supported by detailed evidence or reasoning.
Task Achievement
To fully address the task, it is important to give a balanced discussion of both views and your own opinion. Make sure to explore each view equally before presenting your opinion clearly.
Coherence & Cohesion
Work on the accuracy of language, including spelling, word choice, and grammatical structures, to convey your ideas more effectively and accurately.
Task Achievement
Use more specific and relevant examples to support your points. This will illustrate your arguments and make your essay more convincing.

Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Digital era
  • Global village
  • Networks
  • Online platforms
  • Social media
  • Virtual communities
  • Information dissemination
  • Real-time communication
  • Cyberbullying
  • Digital literacy
  • Online harassment
  • Privacy concerns
  • Digital footprint
  • Social networking
  • Echo chambers
  • Hashtag activism
  • User-generated content
  • Screen time
  • Mental well-being
  • Face-to-face interaction
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