The tables give information about the temperatures and hours of daylight in London and Sydney during the same weekend in December 2018. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The tables give information about the temperatures and hours of daylight in London and Sydney during the same weekend in December 2018.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
The tables
shows
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about
weather
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the weather
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, especially the temperatures and the time of sunrise and sunset in the capital city of
UK
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the UK
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and Australia in December 2018.
overall
,
London
has lower
temperature
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temperatures
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and short daylight
while
Sydney
has higher
temperature
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temperatures
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and long daylight. The
temperature
unit was in
degree
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degrees
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celcius
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celsius
. On Friday 28th,
london
has
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the lowest
temperature
, it was 4
degree
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degrees
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celcius
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Celcius
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and
maximum
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the maximum
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temperature
was 9
degree
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degrees
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celcius
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Celcius
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, different from
sydney
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Sydney
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which has a gap up to 9
degree
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degrees
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which
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where
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the maximum was
at
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apply
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26
degree
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degrees
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and
minimum
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the minimum
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at 17
degree
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degrees
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. In the following two days,
London
was 13 and 10
degree
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degrees
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fro
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for
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maximum
temperture
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temperature
temperatures
and 3 and 5
degree
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degrees
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in
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at
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minimum.
Sydney
has 28
degree
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degrees
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and 31
degree
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degrees
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which is the highest
temperature
of the
last
three days and the minimum was at 18 and 19
degree
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degrees
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. Sunrise in
London
started at 8.05 a.
m
, and increased
one
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by one
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minutes
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minute
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only in the next two days,
while
sunset was a 3.57 p.
m
. and plus 1
minutes
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minute
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each day.
Sydney
was
more early
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earlier
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for sunrise, it was at 5.45
a.
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a.m.
m
for
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on
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Friday and Saturday,
while
Sunday
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on Sunday
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at 5.46. Sunset in
Sydney
was at 8.06 p.
m
. on Friday, and 8.07 p.
m
. on Saturday and
sunday
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Sunday
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.
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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "while".
Basic structure: Change the third paragraph.
Vocabulary: Replace the words london, temperature, sydney, degree, m with synonyms.
Vocabulary: Only 4 basic words for charts were used.
Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the second paragraph.
Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the third paragraph.

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • temperatures
  • hours of daylight
  • comparison
  • London
  • Sydney
  • December 2018
  • weekend
  • information
  • data
  • summarise
  • select
  • report
  • features
  • analysis
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