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Atomic energy ( Nuclear power )is becoming more and more popular energy source. However, some people argue that nuclear power puts life on the Earth to danger Discuss both view and give your opinion?

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Now days
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 ATOMIC ENERGY is used for a lot of things and can be helpful and threatening at the same time. It is
also
 becoming really popular
also
, in
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 way and a dangerous way. Nuclear
power
 is indeed helpful in and used in many ways,
such
 as electricity,medicine, space exploration and criminal investigations.
In addition
, if there was
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 of that energy
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society would be in big trouble. Because
,
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 many lives depend on
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 type of energy.
On the other
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 it can be really dangerous. Meaning, that if the NUCLEAR
POWER
 is in the wrong hands the whole world may face severe consequences. The reason behind
that is
 that
this
 kind of
power
 can destroy countries and harvest
people
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lifes
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 easily. They are known as,THE NUCLER BOMBS and they have
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 used before.
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 god now they are secured by many countries but, still can be used and it would be a
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 if it does get used. To
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, I think
neclur
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nuclear
power
 can be used in multiple ways
specially
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 if it helps the society But, it can only be controlled and managed by
professinals
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professionals
.
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Make sure your introduction includes a clear thesis statement setting out the structure of the essay. Avoid capitalization errors and maintain a formal tone throughout your writing.
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The conclusion should restate your opinion clearly and summarize the main points of the discussion without introducing new information. Ensure it is distinct from the introduction.
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Support your points with more specific examples and details to strengthen your argument. Show a balanced view by discussing both sides of the issue equally, before clearly stating your own position.
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Be clear and concise in your ideas, ensuring that each paragraph has a single focus and that your reasoning is easy for the reader to follow.
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    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
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    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
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