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Social media enable people to keep in touch with each other and learn about news events. Do advantages outweigh disadvantages?

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Social
media
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 is able to make every person still
communication
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communicate
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 with others, and it is
media
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 to study
about
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apply
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news events.
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these
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 merits of using social
media
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numerous
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 rather than
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. On the
one
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 hand,
one
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 significant benefit of someone using social
media
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makes someone
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 easy to still interact with other
people
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 in spite of the long distance. They are able to communicate without going to some places and spending a lot of money.
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, children who are working or studying abroad can call their parents to give
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information
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of
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 their condition so that their families do not worry because the family knows the situation of their children.
Secondly
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, another notable is each
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people
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person
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easy
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to obtain
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 some
information
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of
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about
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 events. They are able to know the new and trending news that
make
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makes
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 them not left behind some events. Instagram, TikTok and Facebook are the best
example
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examples
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 of
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apply
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some
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social
medias
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media
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 that can be utilized to acquire some
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,
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 and nay, these applications can
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the
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knowledge.
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, there is a disadvantage of using social
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 that it can make someone who
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lives
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 near
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them
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feel
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 so far
.
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 Social
media
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creates
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people
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becoming
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to become too
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 lazy to interact face to face, and they prefer communication with another person through that tool.
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, nowadays, many youngsters call their mother via
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social
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medias
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media
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a
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such
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WhatsApp
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as WhatsApp
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 even if that time they are
in
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at
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the
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one
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home.
To conclude
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, there are some advantages
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 using social
media
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such
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 as easier to communicate with
other
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others
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 who
leave
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live
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 in distant
place
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places
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 and easy to gain some
information
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.
However
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, it
also
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 brings a detriment namely making
people
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 who are close
becoming
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become
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 distant.

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Introduction & Conclusion
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Paragraph Structure
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Task Response
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Supporting Examples
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