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The graph below shows the number of tourists visiting a particular Caribbean island between 2010 and 2017.

The graph below shows the number of tourists visiting a particular Caribbean island between 2010 and 2017.
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The line graph compares
visitors
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 of the Caribbean
island
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 throughout a period from 2010 to 2017 on the basis of three groups.
Overall
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, it can be seen that during
this
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 period the number of
visitors
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 soared in total. What stands out is that the number of people who stayed on the
island
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 overtook the number of
visitors
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stayed
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who stayed
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 on cruise ships in 2015. In 2010,
Caribbean
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the Caribbean
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 was visited by 1
million
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of
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apply
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visitors
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, and those who travelled by cruise ships consisted less than 0.5
million
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 of
this
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 figure,
whereas
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 more than 0.5
million
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of
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apply
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tourists stayed on the
island
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. Despite initial
fluctuation
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fluctuation,
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 the rate of people who came to
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island
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the island
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 through cruise ships dramatically increased to 2
million
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 in 2017. Between 2010 and 2011 the figures for passengers who stayed on the
island
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was
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were
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 steady
then
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, increased to 1.5
million
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 and after two years, their numbers fell to a little under 1.5 but
it
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they
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 fell back to 1.5 in 2017.
According to
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 the graph,
it is clear that
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 over these 7
years
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years,
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 total
numbers
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number
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 of
visitors
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 saw a dramatic rise to 3.5
million
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.

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Vocabulary: Replace the words visitors, island, million with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "graph" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "figure" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "number of" was used 4 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "fell" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "increased" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "stayed" was used 4 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "dramatically" was used 2 times.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • fluctuation
  • peak
  • trough
  • upward trend
  • downward trend
  • steady increase
  • sharp decline
  • seasonal variation
  • cruise ship visitors
  • island stay visitors
  • economic impact
  • environmental impact
  • tourism industry
  • sustainable tourism
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