the map shows developments, which took place in the bookstore between 2000 and now.

the map shows developments, which took place in the bookstore between 2000 and now.
The map shows a comparison of bookstore developments from 2000 to and nowadays. Generally, they rearranged most of the
books
' placement and
also
the facilities
itself
Correct pronoun usage
themselves
show examples
.
However
, there are several things that remained the same.
It is clear that
the fiction
books
section from 2002 already changed into
a
Correct the article-noun agreement
apply
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4 different sections of genres, which are art, hobbies, cookery and travel.
Then
on the right side, they renovated the fiction
books
section into a non-fiction one.
Moreover
, the current tables were used to be places for three types of
book
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books
show examples
.
Not to mention
, they
also
replaced the
non-fiction's
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non-fiction
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section
into
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with
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a Cafe. But , there are three places that remained the same which are the travel
books
, the latest
books
, and the service desk.
Not to mention
, the entrance still
start
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starts
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in the same place and direction.
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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "also, not to mention".
Basic structure: Write more paragraphs.
Basic structure: Add more body paragraphs.
Common mistake: Your writing should be 150-250 words.
Basic structure: Write more paragraphs.
Vocabulary: Replace the words books with synonyms.
Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "shows" in your introduction.
Vocabulary: Only 6 basic words for charts were used.
Vocabulary: The word "remained" was used 2 times.
Topic Vocabulary:
  • depicts
  • changes
  • occurred
  • transformations
  • developments
  • span
  • visual
  • comparison
  • illustrates
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