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Some people think that cities are the best places to live. Others prefer to live in rural areas. Discuss both views and give your own opinion. Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

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Every man comes to
this
 question sometimes: what is the best place to live? Living a active live in a busy town or having more relaxed lifetime in the remote area. Today we are going to discuss both sides. On the one hand we got people who prefer cities more. Pros are obvious: only living in a big
city
 you are having all neccesary things
such
 as medical centers, public transport. Shools and all other accommodation in a close access. You don't have to spend hours to commute to work, or to store. Morever, living in the
city
 could be more enjoyable because there you have different ways to have fun: restaurants, cafes, theaters, cinemas etc.
In addition
 living in a town you got more opportunities to find job with a larger salary, to let yourself a Better and more expensive holiday, education etc. As living the busy life in a
city
 is considered we should pass to a rural areas locals. For them personal area intimicy could matter. Living in rural areas you have more time with yourself than in a
city
, so it could cause productivy and creativity increase. Another point for it is healthy environment. No industries and enomerous count of cars poisoning air with it gasses and plenty of gardening make your lungs thankful.
Although
, village locals don't have a big choice in their shopes, any way all food represented there is totally natural so it make you having less stomach illnesses.
To conclude
 both sides I should give my opinion, and I have to say no doubts it is better to have a chance to live In the
city
 and in the village at the same time.
For example
 you can live in a town in weekdays - working and enjoying the
city
 treasures. And your weekends could be spent in a villages - with can help you relax, reload your brains after complicated five days and get ready for a new chalangable days
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Be sure to have a clear introduction that presents the topic and your thesis statement. In the body paragraphs, fully develop your ideas about the advantages and disadvantages of living in cities and rural areas, providing specific examples to support your points. Finally, make sure your conclusion effectively summarizes your main points and clearly states your personal opinion.
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Work on creating a logical flow of ideas. Use transition words and phrases to connect sentences and paragraphs smoothly. Organize your essay into clear paragraphs with topic sentences that outline the main idea contained within each paragraph.
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Include more detailed and relevant examples that support your main points. The examples should help illustrate your reasons and provide a clearer picture to the reader of your stance and understanding of the topic.

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