Living in country where you have to speak a foreign language can cause serious social problems, as well as practical problems to what extent do you agree or disagree with this statement?

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In
the
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world where globalization becoming common, some people try to seek
opportunity
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opportunities
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and
living
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in
the
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foreign
country
either
for
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study or work.
This
phenomenon can
cause
social
issue
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issues
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as well as
practical
issue
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issues
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for
someone
who just
try
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tries
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to live abroad for the first time. Personally, I agree that living in
the
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foreign land can have several
weakness
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weaknesses
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due to
several
point
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discussed below
First,
reside
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residing
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on
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in
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country
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a country
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where you have to speak on different
language
can
cause
cultural problems. Most of the
language
of a
country
has a deep connection with its culture and tradition. When
someone
try
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tries
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to speak another
language
without
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considering
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the culture behind it, sometimes it can
cause
a misunderstanding. Nodding,
for instance
, in some countries it means ‘no’,
while
in other countries it means ‘yes’.
In addition
, people with different
background
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backgrounds
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can interpret the same thing with different
perspective
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perspectives
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.
For example
, hugging can be a way to express your closeness with
someone
. In several countries, it can be only done to your family,
meanwhile
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meanwhile,
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in other parts of the world, you can do it with
someone
you just met.
Second,
living
on
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in
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foreign
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a foreign
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land
affect
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affects
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your daily
lives
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life
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. Most of the
times
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time
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, when
someone
just moved to another
country
, it is very hard for them to adapt
with
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to
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the new situation. It can
cause
several issues
such
as changes in daily
habit
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habits
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and changes in how to interact with people etc.
In addition
, personal problems can arise from
this
case like homesickness.
To sum up
, living in a
country
where it has
different
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a different
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language
than your own can
cause
cultural
issue
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issues
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and
cause
change
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changes
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in your daily lives.
However
, I do believe that all those
issue
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will be diminished as time
gone
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by as
human
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humans
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have the ability to adapt.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • linguistic proficiency
  • cross-cultural communication
  • miscommunication
  • social integration
  • linguistic alienation
  • cultural dissonance
  • language acquisition
  • communication breakdown
  • interpreter services
  • language courses
  • bilingualism
  • multilingualism
  • language barrier
  • effective communication
  • cultural assimilation
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