The bar charts below show the main reasons for study among students of different age groups and the amount of support they received from employers.

The bar charts below show the main reasons for study among students of different age 

groups and the amount of support they received from employers.
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There are two bar charts, the first one shows the average reason for
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study
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studying
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for students of different age groups. The second one
,
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illustrates the support that they have received
by
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from
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employers. Figures are given between under 26 and over 49
years
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old.
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, the main reason for
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study of
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studying
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younger people is for
career
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their career
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,
on the other hand
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, older students prefer to
study
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due to
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interest. Young people are more supported by employers than the older. Concerning students under 26
years
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old, 80%
study
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because of their career and only 10% are for interest. The career importance goes in descent as the
years
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go by.
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, the interest grows.
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, the over 49
years
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old community has 70% studying for pleasure,
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almost 20% is to increase their progress. The employer's support has as well an evolution. It starts up and
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goes down,
however
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,
then
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it goes up again. The youngest generation of
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graph,
have
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almost 65% of
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the administration
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administration
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administration's
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backing. The oldest one has around 45% of encouragement
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Vocabulary: Replace the words study, years with synonyms.
Vocabulary: The word "goes down" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "almost" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the second paragraph.
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