The pie chart below shows the native languages spoken by students at Bakersfield senior college in two separate years. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main feature, and make comparisons where relevant.

The pie chart below shows the native languages spoken by students at Bakersfield senior college in two separate years. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main feature, and make comparisons where relevant.
The two charts above provide data on
students
of Bakersfield native languages which include English, Urdu, Chinese, and others over two different years. In the year 1980, English was the highest with 70% of the population,
then
the second place is Urdu with 15%, and the rest is divided by 9% of Chinese and others in 6%.
However
, some of the data has been changed over two years.
However
, English is still the first language of most Bakersfield
students
, though the number slightly falls to 55% of all
students
.
On the other hand
, Urdu and Chinese
students
increased to 28% and 11%,
while
others still maintained 6%.
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