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The chart below shows what Anthropology graduates from one university did after finishing their undergraduate degree course. The table shows the salaries of the anthropologists in work after five years. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The chart below shows what Anthropology graduates from one university did after finishing their undergraduate degree course. The table shows the salaries of the anthropologists in work after five years. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
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The pie chart displays some job prospects for
an
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undergraduated
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undergraduate
 anthropology students,
while
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 the table illustrates professions' salaries in 5 years duration.
Overall
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, more than half of the graduates do a full-time job and most of those who
work
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 in the government sector
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 paid the highest. The chart shows that there are more than 52% of the graduates who
work
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 in a
fulll-time
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full-time
 occupation.
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, the number of
a
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part-time workers is around 15%, compared to the unemployed one which is only 3% less.
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, approximately 8% of them decided to continue their studies by going to a postgraduate school full-time. Being the least contributor, there is only about 5% of them who
work
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 in part-time
job
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as well as
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 their postgraduate education.
On the other hand
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, the table gives information that the amount of employees who got paid under 80,000 dollars is only 20%, whether they
work
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 in the government sector or as
a
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freelance consultants. In comparison, almost half of the people who
work
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 in
the
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government
company
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companies are
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 paid above 100,000 dollars, which is larger than the freelance advisers
that
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only 40%.
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, the maximum income for those who
work
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 in
a private manufacturers
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private manufacturers
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 is about 80,000 dollars, which is dominated by 35% of the workers.
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Vocabulary: The word "table" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "about" was used 2 times.
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