thw two pie charts show online shopping sales for retail sectors in Canada in 2005 and 2010.

thw two pie charts show online shopping sales for retail sectors in Canada in 2005 and 2010.
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The following pie charts illustrate the cyberspace purchasing for commerce sectors in Canada in the 5-year period of time from 2005 and 2010. Looking from an
overall
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perspective, it is readily apparent that the retail sectors to increase were video games and food and beverage,
on the other hand
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, electronics, appliance, and home furnishings decreased over the given period.
According to
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the figure, video games accounted for just under a fifth to go up by 5 per
cent
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in 2010.
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, food and beverage comprised 22 per
cent
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at first to climb considerably by exactly 10 per
cent
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in the end. As for remaining, electronics and appliances made up just over a third which
then
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fell by a mere 5 per
cent
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in the
last
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year of the graph.
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, home furnishings took up precisely a quarter in the beginning, and went down significantly by a tenth in the final year surveyed.
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