Countries around the world will be facing significant challenges relating not only to the environment, but population and education as well. What problems will your country face in the next ten years? How can these problems be overcome? Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

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In recent years,multiple challenges related to
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the environment
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environment
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the environment
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,
economy
,
education
,
population
and many others have been witnessed all around the world. Some argue that underdeveloped countries like
Pakistan
will be badly affected by these challenges and the situation in
Pakistan
will get worse in the next ten years.
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essay agrees with
this
statement
due to
many reasons.
One
of the main reasons is
growing
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the growing
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population
of
Pakistan
.
Pakistan
is
one
of the most populated countries in Asia with a
population
of more than 50 million people.
Although
,
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every individual is aware of social, political and economic unrest in the
country
, No
one
take
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any necessary steps to improve the situation. The poor economic infrastructure of the
state
will be badly impacted by the growing prices of dollars in the world. Ever growing
population
with
poor
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a poor
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economy
has made
situation
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the situation
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worse. The sector of
education
is
also
impacted badly by poor infrastructure. Poor and underprivileged people
canot
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can't
afford
education
,which
further
increases the widening gap between
rich
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the rich
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and poor
of
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the
country
.
Nonetheless
, the environmental issues are
also
one
of the
reasonsfor
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reasons for
the devastation of the
state
.
However
, we can still be able to resolve the issues with hard work and persistence. Some effective methods like family planning and
population
control strategies can help the
country
to control
ever-increasing
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the ever-increasing
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population
rate. Younger citizens of the
country
can play a huge part in stabilizing the
economy
of the
state
by giving free
education
to children and underprivileged areas. The issue of environmental pollution is a matter of concern
due to
the increased use of cars, automobiles and private transport. We can combat
this
problem by introducing cheaper prices for public transport. It is the public responsibility to make the environment clean by promoting
use
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the use
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of renewable energy In conclusion, I believe that proper planning must be taken by the government to ensure a better future for the
country
. The residents of the
country
must obey laws and regulations to improve the
economy
of the
state
. We can hope for a better future
,
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if we act as a responsible citizen and try to make the environment safe and secure for the upcoming generations.
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  • for example
  • for instance
  • to illustrate this
  • to give a clear example
  • such as
  • namely
  • to illustrate
  • take, for example

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Sustainability
  • Ecosystem
  • Renewable resources
  • Urbanization
  • Demographics
  • Healthcare system
  • Pension crisis
  • Curriculum development
  • Digital literacy
  • E-learning platforms
  • Lifelong learning
  • Public policy
  • Biodiversity conservation
  • Green technology
  • Population density
  • Generational equity
  • Economic disparity
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