A large copmany In your area has decided to spend a certain amount of money, either to sponsor a local children's sports team foe two years, or to pay for two open-air concerts. it has asked for feedback from the general pubilc. Write a letter to the company.in your letter : - describe the benefites of sponsoring the sports team - summarise the benefits of paying for the concerts - say how you think the company should spend money

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Overall Band Score

Coherence and Cohesion: 5.0

Logical structure

Single idea per paragraph

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Lexical resource: 4.0

Varied vocabulary

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Grammatical Range: 4.0

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Task Achievement: 4.0

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191 words

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