The graph below shows average carbon dioxide (CO) emissions per person in the United Kingdom, Sweden, ltaly and Portugal between 1967 and 2007.Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, andmake comparisons where relevant.

The graph below shows average carbon dioxide (CO) emissions per person in the United Kingdom, Sweden, ltaly and Portugal between 1967 and 2007.Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, andmake comparisons where relevant.
The line graph given illustrates average
carbon
dioxide
emissions per person in various Europe nations over a forty-year period from 1967 to 2007. From an
overall
perspective, it is evident that
amount
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the amount
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of
carbon
dioxide
fumes
on
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from
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each
citizens
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citizen
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in the United Kingdom showed
an
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a
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downward trend,
whereas
a reverse pattern can be
been
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seen
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in the data on Italy and Portual over the years shown. From the beginning of the period, the weight of
carbon
dioxide
compound counted
on
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by
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person
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the person
a person
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in the UK was
highest
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the highest
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, at approximately 11 metric
tonnes
. The figures for Sweden and Italy were lower, at nearly 9 metric
tonnes
and just over 4 metric
tonnes
. Portugal,
however
, accounted for the lowest number, at approximately 1 metric ton. In the following years, after
reached
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a peak of over 10 metric
tonnes
in 1977, the number of
carbon
dioxide
realesed
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released
in Sweden underwent a significant fall to under 6 metric
tonnes
in 2007,
meanwhile
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the data on the UK steadily fell to about 9 metric
tonnes
in the final year. The figure for Italy gradually increased to nearly 8 metric
tonnes
in
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at
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the end of the period,
whereas
that of Portugal
considerable
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considerably
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rose from over 6 metric
tonnes
to nearly 8 metric
tonnes
between 1997 and 2007.
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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "whereas".
Vocabulary: Replace the words carbon, dioxide, tonnes with synonyms.
Vocabulary: The word "figures" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "data" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "fall" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "approximately" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "nearly" was used 3 times.

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • CO2 emissions
  • per capita
  • decline
  • increase
  • trend
  • comparison
  • industrial growth
  • economic development
  • green energy
  • environmental policy
  • Kyoto Protocol
  • EU regulations
  • technological advancement
  • population growth
  • international agreements
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