The graph below shows the different modes of transport used to travel to and from work in one European city in 1960, 1980 and 2000. Write a report for a university lecturer describing the information below.

The graph below shows the different modes of transport used to travel to and from work in one European city in 1960, 1980 and 2000. Write a report for a university lecturer describing the information below.
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The graph provides information about the diverse types of vehicles (train, car, tube, bus) used to travel
as well as
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to go to work in one European city between (1960 and 2000).
Overall
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, the percentage of people who use cars displayed an upward trend,
while
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bus users decreased considerably.
Lastly
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, the commuters who take different transports that move by railroad trucks had some noticeable fluctuations.
To begin
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with, in 1960, almost 18% of citizens caught
traines
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trains
trainers
trained
which became above 25% of total commuters after 20 years. In terms of 2000, the indicator experienced a downward trend
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approximately 22%. Cars were the least popular vehicle among humans, with only merely 6% of the nation transported by car.
Nevertheless
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, in 1980 almost 25% of users it had and around 37%
at the end
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of the period. Tubes were the second most popular vehicle in 1960, with 27% of total users.
However
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, the percentage of people catching tubes plummeted slightly to exactly 20% and afterwards surged a little bit to 25%.
Finally
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, buses were the leader of the most usable transport among others in 1960.
However
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, it declined significantly to 15% in 2000.
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