The charts below show the performance of a bus company in terms of punctuality, both actual and target (what actually happened compared to what the company was trying to achieve), and the number of complaints and passengers.

The charts below show the performance of a bus company in terms of punctuality, both actual and target (what actually happened compared to what the company was trying to achieve), and the number of complaints and passengers.
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bar chart illustrates the punctuality of the bus
company
with both actual and targeted services and the number of
complaints
per thousand passenger journey between the years 1999 to 2003.
Overall
, the
company
only achieved their target in 2003 in the span of half
decade
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,
although
its graph for
complaints
is increasing continuously.
To begin
with, in 1999
business
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the business
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achieved 85% of services arriving on time but their goal was 86% and they had
complaints
of 70K passengers.
On the other hand
, in 2000 they targeted the same 86% but they only reached 82% with the
complaints
100K. In the next two years 2001 and 2002
company
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the company
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targeted 85% of services arriving on time but they
fail
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and only got 84.5 and 84%
while
in 2001
a
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number of
complaints
was
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81 and 105 per thousand passengers.
Lastly
in 2003
finally
the
company
crossed their target of 84.5 % to 84.9% but the
complaints
remained increasing and it reached 120 per thousand passengers journeys.
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Sentences: Add more complex sentences.
Conclusion: The conclusion is too long.
Vocabulary: Replace the words company, complaints with synonyms.
Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "number of" in your introduction.
Vocabulary: The word "number of" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "reached" was used 2 times.
Topic Vocabulary:
  • punctuality
  • target versus actual performance
  • correlation
  • consistency
  • trends
  • passenger numbers
  • complaints
  • assessment
  • measures taken
  • impact
  • effectiveness
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