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The chart below shows the amount of money given to developing countries from five organisations from 2008 to 2011.

The chart below shows the amount of money given to developing countries from five organisations from 2008 to 2011.
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The bar chart depicts the number of
money
 received by developing countries from different
organisation
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organisations
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 over a
three-years
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three-year
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 period.
Overall
, the biggest total of
money
 was from
organisation
 2 and the lowest total of
money
 was from
organisation
 4. Looking in more detail, the amount of
money
 given was dominated by
organisation
 2. Starting from 1.25
billion
dollars
 in 2008
and
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it
was
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increased significantly to more than 2.5
billion
dollars
for
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in
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 3 years.
Furthermore
, the second biggest amount of
money
 was from
organisation
 3. In 2008 there was 1.5
billion
dollars
which
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given to the nations
then
 it went up and down repeatedly and ended
in
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at
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 the same level. In 2008, the developing country
has
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received
money
 from
organisation
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Organisation
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 5 at
aproximately
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approximately
 1.25
billion
dollars
 and it decreased marginally to under 0.5
billion
dollars
during
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over
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 3 years.
Next,
the
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organisation
 1
has given
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gave
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 around 0,6
billion
dollars
 in 2008 after that it fluctuated in
range
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the range
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0.5
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of 0.5
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 to 1
billion
dollars
. Meanwhile, the lowest
of
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the
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amount of
money
 was
organisation
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for organisation
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 4. There was 0,75
billion
dollars
has
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received by the nations and declined slightly to under 0.5
billion
dollars
 in 2011.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words money, organisation, billion, dollars with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "give" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "amount" was used 3 times.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • international aid
  • developing countries
  • economic assistance
  • fluctuations
  • trend analysis
  • philanthropic organizations
  • non-governmental organizations (NGOs)
  • foreign aid
  • donor countries
  • recipient nations
  • financial contributions
  • economic conditions
  • fiscal policies
  • sustainable development
  • humanitarian aid
  • gross domestic product (GDP)
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