Some people believe that professionals, such as doctors and engineer, should be required to work in the country where they did their training. Others believe they should be free to work in another country if they wish. Discuss both these views and give your own opinion.

Some people assert that doctors, engineers and other professionals should have to work only in the
country
where they trained.
Whereas
, others say that they should be free to work worldwide if they want. In
this
essay, I will discuss both perspectives. On one hand, working in their
country
where they had an education
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the area of experts is crucial to
develop for medicals
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, education and science. Governments or some companies,
for instance
, might provide the supply of money for some trainees on a scholarship,
hence
supporters of
this
argument believe that they must contribute
on
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their own countries where they
educated
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. Some people in Japan, to illustrate, argue that students who graduated from public
university
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universities
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should give
the
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duty to
this
country
.
On the other hand
, being free to work in
entire
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world can spread
skills
and knowledge.
Also
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some people would return
their
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country
after obtaining more beneficial
skills
or new methods not able to do in
own
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country
. Their
skills
and experience could benefit
to
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other countries
where
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have unsolved issues
by
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themselves
such
as medicals or education
ones
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. In conclusion, I believe that both arguments have more than enough reasons to assume.
Skills
or experience should be used in the
country
where they learned,
moreover
, they should reveal
skills
all over the world. We need to try to determine what we are capable of, or where we could be helpful in.
While
entering into global society, we should share information or know-how going through other's experiences.
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