The chart below shows the total number of minutes(in billions of telephone calls in the UK, divided into three categories, from 1995-2002.

The chart below shows the total number of minutes(in billions of telephone calls in the UK, divided into three categories, from 1995-2002.
The bar chart provided data on the total
of
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minutes number of telephone calls that were divided into
three
categories, Local-fixed
line
, National and international-fixed
line
, and mobiles (all calls) from 1995 to 2002 in the UK.
Overall
, the Local-fixed
line
predominated the highest number most of the time.
By contrast
, the mobile (all calls) showed stable results in low quantities. As can be seen, a volatile result produced a local-fixed
line
figure, in the initial
three
years from 1995, 1996, and 1997 it slightly increased by 10
billion
each
year
.
Whereas
, there is a small gap between 1998 and 1999 around two
billion
.
Moreover
, only one
year
more it shows a continued declining trend of approximately 10
billion
every
year
for the
last
three
years from 2000, 2001, and 2002.
On the other hand
, compared with
three
other factors, a contrast chart showed
at
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mobile (all calls) results. It
generates
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the lowest start growth number roughly at five
billion
in 1995.
Furthermore
, for the rest of the
year
it prevailed consistently
steatdy
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steady
steadily
until in 2002 it reached a peak of about 45
billion
.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words three, line, billion, year with synonyms.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • total number
  • minutes
  • telephone calls
  • UK
  • divided into
  • categories
  • from
  • to
  • overall
  • increased significantly
  • local fixed-line calls
  • accounted for
  • largest proportion
  • throughout
  • period
  • international calls
  • highest rate of growth
  • experiencing
  • sharp increase
  • national long-distance calls
  • remained relatively stable
  • slight decline
  • towards
  • end
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