in some countries, governments are encouraging industries and business to move to regional areas out side the big cities. Do the advantages of this trend outweigh the disadvantages?
In
this
modern era, goods are produced in factories. They are seen everywhere especially
in crowded places. Add the comma(s)
, especially
However
, public administrations are motivating them to shift to the
places with Correct article usage
apply
less
residential buildings owing to various advantages Correct quantifier usage
fewer
such
as pollution control and to reduce
risk of diseases. Change the verb form
reduced
Hence
, the benefits are more than demerits
.
To commence with, it will aid Correct article usage
the demerits
to control
Change preposition
in controlling
the
pollution. If factories are closed from the big cities, it will result Correct article usage
apply
into
less harmful smoke in the Change preposition
in
air
. People can breath
and get fresh Replace the word
breathe
air
. Moreover
, it will impact into
lower noise Change preposition
apply
level
. Fix the agreement mistake
levels
For example
, In india
, Delhi was one of Change the capitalization
India
polluted
shelter Correct article usage
the polluted
space
with Fix the agreement mistake
spaces
large
number of industries before Change the article
a large
the large
government
put restrictions and Add an article
the government
close
them. Now, there is a control Wrong verb form
closed
in
noise level. Change preposition
on
In addition
to this
, chemicals and wastages
Correct your spelling
waste
of
Change preposition
from
automobile
places are thrown into water or on land Fix the agreement mistake
automobiles
causes
harm to animals. Wrong verb form
causing
The
large number of animals Change the article
A
were died
after the stuff stuck into their throat. Change to the active voice
died
have died
As a result
, in order to safe
Replace the word
save
livestocks
, businesses must be placed near jungles and hilly spots.
Correct your spelling
livestock
Additionally
, people are suffering from various heath
issues like asthma and skin cancers which are caused by machines. Correct your spelling
health
Therefor
, to lower these symptoms shift is essential. Correct your spelling
Therefore
Apart from
this
, for instance
, long
time Correct article usage
a long
age
,a city had a Correct your spelling
ago
blased
from Correct your spelling
blast
a
Change the article
an
industy
and harmful gas was Correct your spelling
industry
spreaded
all over in the Correct your spelling
spread
air
since the day the kids of that place are
born abnormal. Eventually, the impacts can be seen for Wrong verb form
were
long
time so if authorities can stop it before it will be a good illustration for Change the article
a long
future
.
Correct article usage
the future
To conclude
, manufacturing
of consumables and non-consumables Correct article usage
the manufacturing
things are
seen in big cities. Wrong verb form
is
Although
, it is a part and parcel of life but
we can not deny the cons it has to Remove the conjunction
apply
environment
and society like Correct article usage
the environment
air
, water and land pollution and impact
Correct pronoun usage
its impact
in
Change preposition
on
health
of humans. Add an article
the health
Thats
why, it is advisable to open them away from residential buildings.Correct your spelling
That's
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Task Response
Ensure that you fully address the question by discussing both advantages and disadvantages in a balanced manner. Additionally, provide a clear opinion on whether the advantages outweigh the disadvantages.
Coherence and Cohesion
Improve the organization of your ideas. Each paragraph should have a clear main idea and all sentences should be logically connected to that main idea.
Coherence and Cohesion
Use a wider range of cohesive devices to link your ideas more effectively and to help the reader follow your argument more easily.
Task Achievement
While you provided examples, ensure that you include specific and relevant examples to support your points more effectively.
Answer the 'Advantages and Disadvantages' topic
IELTS advantages and disadvantages questions normally give you a statement and ask you to comment on the advantages and disadvantages of that statement.
Answer structure for the type of essay
- Introduction
- Body paragraph 1 – advantages
- Body paragraph 2 – disadvantages
- Conclusion
Examples to start your body paragraph:
- The main advantage is...
- The disadvantage of this...
- The main benefit...
- Despite these advantages...
- One possible drawback...