The given diagram clearly depicts the step-by-step process of carbonated drink production.

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The graph

illustrate

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illustrates

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the whole

alogorithm

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algorithm

of carbonated drink production.

Overall

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process

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the process

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consists of five stages,

strating

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starting

with collecting and

preporation

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preparation

proportion

water

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, and ending with the

delivering

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delivery

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to supermarkets. The two middle stages

dedicated

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for

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the main process of soda

producation

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production

water

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corbanation

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combination

carbonation

. Production starts when raw

water

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enters a filter,

after

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this

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this,

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it is

maked

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made

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softer by using chemicals. In the next step

water

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is pumped to

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electric heater and through

cooling

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a cooling

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pipe goes to a tank where connects with carbon

dioxode

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dioxide

. At

this

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stage

corbonated

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carbonated

water

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is ready,

following

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the following

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manipulation will add flavour and

color

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colour

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to a drink. The third step is where toppings

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are

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added to a carbonated

water

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such

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as colouring, syrup and flavour. All those

ingridients

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ingredients

connected

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are connected

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using

mixing

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a mixing

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tank.

After

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this

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ready

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is ready

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soda is filtered and

poored

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poured

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apply

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bottles or cans. And in the

last

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stage

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stage,

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packaged carbonated drink is delivered to supermarkets.

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Basic structure: Change the third paragraph.

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Vocabulary: Replace the words water with synonyms.

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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "undefined" in your introduction.

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Vocabulary: Only 2 basic words for charts were used.

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meeting the goal of 7 or more
1
Word repetition
meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
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Overall Band Score

Coherence and Cohesion: 8.0

Logical structure

Single idea per paragraph

Introduction & conclusion present

Accurate linking words

Variety in linking words

Lexical resource: 4.0

Varied vocabulary

Accurate spelling & word formation

Grammatical Range: 4.0

Mix of complex & simple sentences

Clear and correct grammar

Task Achievement: 4.0

Complete response

Suitable writing tone

Appropriate word count

3 paragraphs

153 words

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The given diagram clearly depicts the step-by-step process of carbonated drink production.

some people think that men and women have different qualities therefore certain jobs are suitable for men and others for women . To what extent do you you agree or disagree

Nowadays young people admire media and sports stars, even though they do not set a good example. Do you think this is a positive or negative development?

Some people believe that travelling is a valuable experience; others say it is a waste of time and money. Discuss both views and give your own opinion.

The increasing availability of low-cost airlines now lets people travel around the world. Some feel this is a positive development while others think it is negative overall. Discuss both views and provide your own opinion.