The given diagram clearly depicts the step-by-step process of carbonated drink production.

#process #drink #production

The graph

illustrate

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illustrates

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the whole

alogorithm

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algorithm

of carbonated drink production.

Overall

process

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the process

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consists of five stages,

strating

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starting

with collecting and

preporation

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preparation

proportion

water

, and ending with the

delivering

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delivery

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to supermarkets. The two middle stages

dedicated

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for

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the main process of soda

producation

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production

water

corbanation

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combination

carbonation

. Production starts when raw

water

enters a filter,

after

this

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this,

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it is

maked

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made

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softer by using chemicals. In the next step

water

is pumped to

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electric heater and through

cooling

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pipe goes to a tank where connects with carbon

dioxode

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dioxide

. At

this

stage

corbonated

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carbonated

water

is ready,

following

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the following

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manipulation will add flavour and

color

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colour

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to a drink. The third step is where toppings

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are

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added to a carbonated

water

such

as colouring, syrup and flavour. All those

ingridients

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ingredients

connected

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are connected

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using

mixing

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a mixing

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tank.

After

this

ready

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is ready

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soda is filtered and

poored

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poured

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apply

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bottles or cans. And in the

last

stage

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stage,

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packaged carbonated drink is delivered to supermarkets.

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