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Traffic and housing problems could be solved by moving large companies, factories and their employees to the countryside. Do you agree or disagree?

#traffic #companies #factories #employees #countryside
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Living in a busy city makes the world face different kinds of problems
such
 as overpopulation, pollution, traffic and many more. If these companies move to the countryside
then
 they might develop the same problem
that is
 happening in the cities
that is
 why I disagree. Countryside is a peaceful, environmentally friendly and not crowded
place
. If they develop it they might change it completely into a different
place
 which is somehow good because it might open different opportunities to the people who live there
for example
, there will be jobs because of the new buildings, tourism which can give opportunities and the
place
 will be known, construction because they need to develop some areas and many more.
On the other hand
, it will cause the land to be misused and cause damage because of infrastructure, pollution caused by the increasing number of cars, and because many tourists will start going there it will be crowded. The essence of the purity of the
place
 in the countryside will be gone and it will be the same problem that cities are suffering. In conclusion, they should leave the places which are better to keep the quietness and
instead
, we need to conserve it, at some point, there are people who
also
 want some peaceful area to relax and to enjoy nature
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • traffic congestion
  • housing problems
  • countryside
  • large companies
  • factories
  • employees
  • urban areas
  • land availability
  • relocate
  • stimulate economic development
  • challenges
  • infrastructure
  • transportation
  • rural areas
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