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What is your opinion on the impact of artificial lighting on wildlife

#impact #wildlife
We rarely stop to think that there are other creatures, that live here
in
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 earth with us and that every little thing we do affects them, like
for example
 artificial lighting
on
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the
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night, commonly known as
light
 pollution,
can
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 be very negative towards not only wildlife but
also
 humans. To illustrate, sudden changes in
light
 at night can make the frogs and fireflies
to
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start mating and seeking shelter, glowworms
misundertand
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misunderstand
 these lights as communication, migrating birds
confused
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 by
light
, deers become blind for 40 minutes and the list goes on and on. It is especially clear that
light
 pollution affects animals, but what about us
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 Just as the animals we're deeply affected by
this
 problem, as it suppresses melatonin production, which is directly involved with circadian
rythym
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rhythm
rhythms
, sleep, hormones, glucose metabolism and even cancer control. Believe it or not, apart from affecting mammals, bugs and amphibous, it
also
 affects plants affecting plant blooming and causing the trees to lose their leaves. To
counclude
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conclude
,
although
,
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 artificial lightning has become a part of our daily lives,
they
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it
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 undoubtedly
affect
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 our health and
wildlife's
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wildlifes
wildlife
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 in a negative way.
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introduction
Begin the essay with a clear introductory statement that addresses the topic directly and outlines your perspective or argument. You should clearly state your opinion on the impact of artificial lighting on wildlife.
logical structure
Work on the logical structure by ensuring that each paragraph follows a clear theme, and that there is a logical progression between the paragraphs. Use a range of linkers to help with the flow of ideas.
supported main points
Support your main points with more detailed examples and explanations. These examples should be specific and relevant to the topic of artificial lighting's impact on wildlife.
conclusion
Conclude your essay with a concise summary of your discussion that restates your opinion on the topic in a different way. You should ensure that your conclusion is directly connected to what was discussed in the body of your essay.
complete response
Expand on your ideas to offer a more comprehensive discussion that thoroughly addresses the task. Ensure that your essay gives a complete answer to all parts of the question.
relevant specific examples
Use specific, real-world examples to illustrate the points you make about the impact of artificial lighting on wildlife. Such examples should be detailed enough to demonstrate a clear and deep understanding of the issue.

Fully explain your ideas

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    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
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    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
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    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
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