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Band 4.5

In the future, nobody will buy printed newspapers or books because they will be able to read everything they want online without paying. To what extent do you agree or disagree with this statement?

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Some
people
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 argue that in the future there won’t be any
people
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 who want to buy printed
books
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 or
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newspaper
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newspapers
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 because everything they want to read will be served online without paying. As a writer I do not stand with the statement, here are 3 reasons
of
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 it. First of all, the statement
brokes
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 the
principal
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principle
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 of data exchanges. Nowadays
people
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 treat data as the same as money. When you try to get some data or
information
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 you need to pay for it, aline with
books
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 or
newspaper
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. You need to pay the writers or
journalist
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 and all
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people
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the people
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 who
include
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are included
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 in
redaction
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the redaction
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 team
for
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to
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 provide you
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such
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as
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precious
information
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.
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, as a writer, the agencies should pay me for the
books
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 I have written, as same as the readers. Who are suggested to only buy the original
books
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 so they can
also
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 pay for the copyright
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secondly
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, I believe lots of
people
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 still feel more comfortable with
the
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physical
books
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 or
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newspaper
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. We may find a lot of them are sold online, but in some places like
Japan
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Japan,
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 there are still many
of
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readers who prefer to buy physical
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 so they can make a collection or library as their
hobbies
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hobby
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. Many elderly are more prefer physical
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newspaper
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 to be read
everymorning
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every morning
 so they can prevent their eyes from
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.
in
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 the
another
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other
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 hand, there are lots of places
who
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that
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 still do not have access
for
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to
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the internet
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internet
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Internet
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. In the third countries
who
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 are still developing, it will be difficult for them to deliver the
information
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 without printed
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newspaper
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 or
books
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. Unlike the modern country
which
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apply
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almost every citizen can access
to
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the internet.
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, as I
state
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 before
that
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apply
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information
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 nowadays
are
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is
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 equal
with
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 money, so I think it is wise to consider the copyright payment for the
information
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 providers. in conclusion, we can say that in the future there will still be needed printed
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newspaper
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newspapers
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 and
book
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books
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, not only to spread
the
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apply
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information
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 but
also
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 to respect the
information
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provider
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providers
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 in
this
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 case could be writes or journalists.
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 that, we believe physical
book
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books
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 or
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newspaper
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 are better for sight health
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then
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than
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the
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apply
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online ones.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • accessibility
  • convenience
  • cost-effective
  • cultural value
  • sentimental value
  • reliability
  • distracting
  • access to
  • digital devices
  • internet
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